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That final chapter had to be my favorite of the entire piece. The way you were able to convey the emotions was fantastic as it kept in character, making it feel like a discovery for both the protagonist and the reader. I am usually not a fan of first-person writing simply because many authors end up over-explaining the story through the mouthpiece of the protagonist. You did a great job at avoiding this and I never felt like I was getting bogged down in the details of the piece, yet I was still given enough information to understand what was going on around me with just enough to leave me wanting to read and understand more. It's a great balance and one I think a lot of people struggle with.
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